ngome [xy xx] Runaway while wewe can

I decided to make my first shabiki fiction about ngome and Beckett so constructive criticism is appreciated. Please comment.




"It's getting late, we should sleep on it." ngome alisema looking at his watch.
Beckett looked up from the papers she was reading.
"Separately!" ngome stammered quickly.
Beckett lowered her eyes to the floor.
"Katherine Beckett, I never..." ngome whispered as he headed for the door.
"Well, why not, Castle? Am I not attractive enough for you?"
"No." ngome alisema turning around.
Beckett got up from her chair and walked over to Castle. "Then what is it? Don't wewe sleep with...