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The ocean

He gives me a smile,
he allows me to fly.
I’m flying like a bird,
free and placid.
He gives me a strength,
i give him my mind.
My moyo is full of his thoughts,
full of his brightness,
full of his silence.
But still,he’s like the ocean,
so deep and mysterious,
wewe can not find his soul
unless it finds you.
And i’m so brave and such a coward
the same time,
i need him zaidi and more,
and i’m scared,
oh i’m scared for he found my soul.
Don’t blind your eyes not to see,
don’t trap your mind not to feel.
Oh, i wish to touch his hair gently,
oh, i wish to calm in his embrace.
I want him to see it in my eyes,
to feel that my upendo
will never betray him,
and i want him to be what he is already,
himself.

What do wewe think of this poem?
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CB4evaGiggles said:
haha, wow, i think its really good!
=D
great job!
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Thank you. :)
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torriebee said:
wow thats soo good~ wewe could have a cool slide onyesha while kusoma this haha
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lol Thanks sweetie. ♥
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Lovetreehill said:
Great one ! I upendo it !
You're a good writer Irena, never give up ;)
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Thank wewe honey. I won't! :*
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I hope that :)
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♥ ♥ ♥
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Spi_Kat_Penguin said:
I ♥ It, ...wow....I cant describe my feelings as im reading...Its very good...

-Spi
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Thank wewe so much. ♥
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RavenRox2 said:
that's amazing!! I upendo it!! <333
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~ Thank you. ~
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your welcome!! :]]
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sugarsweet076 said:
i upendo it!!! great job!!!
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:) Thanks. :)
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clanbillr said:
I'm not much of a poet but I like it!! It makes me think how very calm, but with a small ripple and then ruthless the ocean can be!!
Thank wewe for the poem!!!
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I'm not much of a poet but I like it!! It makes me think how very calm, but with a small ripple and then ruthless the ocean can be!! Thank wewe for the poem!!!
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Aw thank you. :)
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Oh yes, the ocean can be calm and ruthless the same time,mysterious.
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Sure. I will. :)
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MrOrange16 said:
Its so beautiful! *sniff*
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Thank you. ;)
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heyitssmarsx3 said:
that's an excellent poem, good job!!
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Thank you. ♥
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gossiprincess said:
waw this is an awsum poem!=D
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jem_ said:
i enjoyed kusoma it, really raw and lovely :)
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thank you. ♥
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juicyjossy9 said:
Scared to be scarred... I've been there. Like many of us humans. wewe touched me right on the spot. Don't worry, it does not make me sad. To the contrary, it reminds me what makes my moyo beat, so blindly true and so human to be close to my emotions. Craving to upendo and be loved kwa a loved one is ALL THERE IS. Thanks for posting this. wewe make my day. If wewe don't mind, it will now be part of my "Treasures" book. jj9
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Thank wewe so much. ♥ Of course i don't mind,i'm delighted. ♥
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LunaShay said:
Its....beautiful :') if my kauli mbiu was big enough,i would put this on there!
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lol thanks. :)
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Pikafan32 said:
Are wewe gonna name all of them 'What do wewe think of this poem?'

No... just kidding

Anyways the real review

It was really good. One of your better works, but not the best. Have wewe ever tried a murder poem, au a happy one. I'm fine with the style wewe have now, but from experience I would have to say that it's easier to write your own genre if wewe try others.

- Re Re
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lol Yes you're right,it is easier to write your own genre. Well who knows, i might try something new. lol
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Mallory101 said:
upendo it! ♥
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thank you. :)
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gaby124 said:
your poem is so good i can´t find the words to describe it! If ur dream is to be a writer then wewe have a very good chance of being such a wonderful and amazing writer!!! keep on following ur dreams!! : )
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aw thank wewe so much and thanks for the support. ♥
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