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I upendo music, so I wrote this to share some songs I wrote. I'm working towards my dreams to become a singer right now. Here are some songs:

Your one last wish,
Remains unsaid,
You’ll cry into the night,
On your death bed,
Dying,
How will they remember you,
When you’re gone?
Six feet,
Underground,
wewe lay,
In a coffin filled with silk,
Wilted flowers strewn about,
How will they remember you,
When you’re not around?
They throw dirt,
Over your grave,
Your unseeing eyes,
Wide open,
All of your,
Hearts desires are gone,
Your mind no longer corrupted,
How will they remember you,
When you’re gone?
Six feet,
Underground,
wewe lay,
In a coffin filled with silk,
Wilted flowers strewn about,
How will they remember you,
When you’re not around?
Five bullets,
Implanted in your pale skin,
Your face is all red and white,
It’s your turn,
Is there life after death?
Tell me now.
How will they remember you,
When you’re gone?
Six feet,
Underground,
wewe lay,
In a coffin filled with silk,
Wilted flowers strewn about,
How will they remember you,
When you’re not around?
When you’re gone,
Your loved ones crying,
But they’ll forget you,
Live on with life soon,
So soon.






Is there anyone out there,
Feeling so alone?
Are wewe filled with sorrow?
Have wewe been broken down?

And I want wewe to know,
I can’t stay forever,
We all die in the end,
But we can jiunge together,
And make the best of not fitting in!

wewe are unique,
What’s normal anyway?
If we’re all different,
Why do we even try to be the same?


And I want wewe to know,
I can’t stay forever,
We all die in the end,
But we can jiunge together,
And make the best of not fitting in!

Make the best of life!
Now sing along if wewe broken!
Sing along if you’re gonna stand up and fight!
Now fight!
Live in the moment!
Don’t let anyone put wewe down!

And I want wewe to know,
I can’t stay forever,
We all die in the end,
But we can