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uandishi Swali

would wewe read this?

be honest, would wewe read this? this is just the prologue though and not finished, it might get fixed and edited. so please be honest and tell me wat u think:

I have always been fascinated kwa Mbwa mwitu loups ever since I could remember. The way they disguise themselves in the trees, their wonderful yielding fur, manyoya and the way I get Lost in those deep yellow liquid eyes. Their fur, manyoya calls me, and I just want to stroke my hands through it. I could just let my hands rest in their fur, manyoya forever. Their eerie howl is like a melody to my ears. To others it may sound like ghosts wailing, but to me it sounds like a sonata. A lonely, sad call sent out into the darkness hoping to fall upon the ears of others who share the night's isolation. I guess this empathic connection I had with these mysterious creatures should have been a sign of things to come, because when I was ten something big happened. But I guess that’s why a part of me died.

I had a dream one night. I was in my backyard and I saw the faint glow of a wolf’s eyes. That amber glow that can never be replicated even kwa the most talented artists. The way those eyes shine against the moon. That yellow liquid reflecting every ray of moonlight that comes close to those eyes. The eyes rose and they came nearer. I took a vigilant step back. The eyes came out into full view. No zaidi dark gloomy trees hiding those watchful eyes. Not even the blackness of the darkest night could hide that glow.

But, instead of seeing a mbwa mwitu I saw a man. It was a man that had a feral look to his eyes. He emerged not with the upendo of the night but with a trapped look to his eyes. Like the moon was his prison and the trees were the iron bars holding him from the world.

Then the scene shifted and I was in an entirely different place. The trees were black and the sky was a lighter shade of gray. As the sun was setting, shadows of the trees bounced off them and onto the ground. Then picha of different places flew into my head. I saw a city, and it
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was completely dark almost like a fog enclosed the entire town. They were pale and they had black eyes that seemed never-ending. They walked promptly, swiftly, and gracefully throughout the streets. Then I was transported to a brilliant place where kwa just standing there wewe were instantaneously happier. The people here had a confident stride. I saw insight in their eyes like they have seen zaidi than the typical individual. They greeted each other with grins. Now I was in a different city. Everything was covered from head toe to with reflected rainbows. Nothing stayed in one spot au one color for too long. Here everyone had almost an ever changing presence. Their aura felt like it was changing non stop, never coming to a halt. inayofuata I was in a town that was enclosed kwa trees. The people that lived here looked almost like animals. They were prepared for combat if attacked. One thing about all of those places was that I felt like I didn’t belong, and like I was imperceptible to all of them. Then I was thrust back into my room. I awoke disoriented and confused. My breaths were quick and shallow while my room felt overwhelmingly warm and small. I kick back the sheets and blankets from my body and now exposed the air feels cool against my skin. I head over to my desk. I noticed in my hand I had been holding a pencil since I awakened from my dream. On the dawati rested a piece of paper that had been written on. I staggered back because it was written in my handwriting. I picked up the paper and read: When the world was in despair, Humans needed aid, From the four hidden nations, Then the four nations came together. One from the forever still, One born of ancient power, One from the changing beauty, And one born of the moon and the trees. They rose to power Imprisoned the evil Four cities rest Around the prison nest I didn’t know what that meant. I was so confused. Sure it’s in my hand uandishi but I don’t remember uandishi that. I ... I couldn’t have. I had to get out of there. I hurriedly put on a pair of jeans, my black knit kanzu, koti over my tank top, and a pair of Nike tennis shoes. I ran out of the house and to the woods. The woods. The only place I could be whole and sane. It’s where I would be comforted kwa my wolves. I ran as fast as I could toward my happy place. Once I was in the woods I walked with a slow and easy stride. I repeated the poem again and again, trying to figure out its meaning. When I alisema it about the fifth time I heard the snap of a branch and turned to my left. A mbwa mwitu came out of a shadow and into full view. The mbwa mwitu was no longer hidden; for once I had no fear. The wolf’s form was now perceptible to my eyes. The inky veil of black that is the night was gone. I could see a sandy brown mbwa mwitu with yellow eyes staring at me with remorse. I lowered myself to his level and stuck my hand out for him to sniff. But instead of approaching me carefully he charged straight for me. I froze with fear; my limbs not able to move. Then leaves crunched to my right. I spun around rapidly to discover a gray mbwa mwitu charging at me with fierce blue eyes. I stared at that mbwa mwitu a long time. But then I was shoved backward. I twisted to face the sandy brown wolf. He pinned me kwa my shoulders. Being only ten I couldn’t move. Then the gray mbwa mwitu trotted up. He looked in my eyes as if to make sure it was me. And then he spoke with a sort of growl, “You know too much.” Next, the gray wolf… he… he bit me and dug his teeth into my neck. I screamed. It was a terrible scream. The scream was bloodcurdling and chilling. The mbwa mwitu let go of my neck, and I moved my hand to my neck to stop the bleeding. But the blood just kept coming. Then the two Mbwa mwitu loups dragged me further into the forest.
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oh it was great , until a branch snapped. and a gift aliyopewa in peace, to be broken. it was in wewe writing.everything happens for a reason. except a bite. hoping to get wewe awake to remenber,afore wewe get dragged off again into ablivion,of no faith ;-]
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paperairplanes said:
I may read it... I'm not sure because I think I haven't read enough but it seems good :) I think wewe can write a good story about Mbwa mwitu loups but it seems another "werewolf mania" story so, if wewe wanna be different and write a good story wewe should try to give it a "touch" that can make it pretty awesome (it seems the "werewolf mania" au the "vampire mania" has risen up because of Twilight series... I don't like those vitabu but I must say I've watched the whole BTVS episodes and I liked them so, I've no bad things to say about the twilighters... only if they have common sense)
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forksandspoons said:
ya i would, it sounds really good n i <3 vitabu about wolves
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wow that sounds even zaidi amazing, i would soo read that book, trust me i <3 to read n i know a good story when i c 1 :)
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thanks
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bri-marie said:
I would.
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fallingmelody said:
idk
u describe things well though. ^-^
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Immortal42 said:
First of all, I just want to say that your uandishi is amazing! wewe are a wonderful writer. But, no, I probably wouldn't read that because I'm not into the whole mbwa mwitu thing. Don't stop writing, though!
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ya some vitabu rnt for everybody
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M169 said:
I Think it is written great!
It's just not my type of book...Sorry. :) But wewe know, some vitabu just aren't for me....I wish they all were though.
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yea
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sasuhia4ever said:
that is some amazing writing! i don't just say that it's really good, wewe should continue the story! i know i'll be one to read it if wewe do! :)
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Silverain said:
YES!!! That was very good. It was interesting and captured my attention right away. And it left me wanting more:) wewe should continue with the story, you're a great writer!
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TVjunkie7598 said:
THAT WAS EPIC!
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thanks that means a lot
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Friendly_Girl said:
I wouldn't, because I'm not generally into the whole wolf-stories thing, but I really upendo the way wewe describe. It keeps the reader interested. Keep going, if wewe write like this from your sixteen, I can only imagine how you'll write at your twenty au thirty :)
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thanks that means alot
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moodystuff449 said:
Very well done. Good grammer, spelling, descriptions, and wewe do well with keeping the reader interested. I've read so many different stories where people will use the same word over, and over. wewe didn't have a single problem with anything it seems. Even though I don't usually read things such as this, I find this story an exception. Make sure to tell us when it's published. :)
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thanks and will do
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1-2vampire said:
I upendo upendo upendo the style of uandishi there; it is really good, and wewe describe everything very well. It gives a sense of darkness, the night, the moon, and it's the tension, and words that drag me into the story as if it's happening around me. Fantastico, muy bien. Mi encanta, mi encanta! Sorry, have to practice spanish for tests. I wouldn't read the type on story you're writing; it's not the type of thing I'd read, personally. But I would upendo to read zaidi of what wewe write. Rydw i'n dwili ar! (Sorry have to practice welsh too)
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2dolphn97 said:
Omg.luv luv luv it omg amaIng uandishi normally when people are like saying I'm attracted to something and it goes on and on an on but not this I was instantly attracted to it I'm totally invto all of that ndoto crap and I would totally read it i think it would be a hit on the readers charts u would have to send me an autographed piblished copy of it to me omg amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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roxasismine23 said:
Your a really good writer, but I wouldn't read t cuz it's not my type of book, sorry!

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lovemarauders said:
wewe are a really great writer from what I see here, but I wouldn't read it. It isn't the type of book I would be drawn to. I bet lots of other people would upendo it!
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