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Here's the poem. What do wewe think?

upendo me...
Don't...
Hate me...
Don't...
Touch me...
Don't...
Hurt me...
Don't...
Save me...
Don't...
Rape me...
Don't...
It's the same now,
whenever i see the emptiness
in your eyes,
this coldness in your eyes
is killing me,
but your hands are still warm...
And i know,
oh i know my moyo still
belongs to you,
and wewe hate me,
oh wewe hate it...
wewe hate my pure love,
but your hands are still warm...
And i want you,
oh i still want you,
but i'm scared,
oh i'm scared,
and now i see,
oh i see the emptiness in your eyes,
this coldness in your eyes
is killing me,
but wewe don't care,
you'll tear my soul over and over again,
and wewe hate me,
oh wewe hate me,cause i upendo wewe so,
oh i hate my pure love,
and you're smiling to my pain,
and now i see the emptiness
in your eyes,
but your hands are still warm...
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wow chick, that is AMAZING! Did wewe write that?
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Yeah.. Thanks.....
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Thank you.
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CullenProperty said:
I upendo it, really. It could also be a song, ya know? It has the rhythem and all that. Do wewe sing? Except, if it was a song, it might sound better if wewe take out the "Don'ts" and just like whisper the first parts; "Love me, Hate me..." That'd be cool.
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Thanks.... Well,no,i can't sing... lol
irena83 posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita
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Yeah that would b amazing
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yup ;)
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EalasaidWooster said:
I like it, it's very good! :)
It has a lot of deep emotions -very well expressed, kwa the way!
And I like your use of repetition, it's really effective. :)
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Thank you... <3
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Your welcome! x)
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UriahA said:
Nice
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Thanks a lot.
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yoshifan1976 said:
Very cool poem :D
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reesesdog said:
nice

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inexplicable said:
It´s very good and... deep.
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Yeah,it is... Thanks...
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orangeturnip said:
its cool ..
i think there is something special about poems
wewe get a snapshot of your subconscious...

thanks for the poem ... i beleve tha was from the heart.
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Thank u
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Yeah.....
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RanmaRaj said:
O My God
You're awesome
Thats such a sweet song
Really moyo touchin
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Thank u......
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Twilight_Dream said:
really insightful! i liked it a lot. it could also be a song. it sounded zaidi like a song to me. and im actually already making up a tune to it.
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Thanks...
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highlife said:
wow its well written
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Thanks... <3
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Funnygirl77 said:
That was deep I loved it
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Thanks.
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Spi_Kat_Penguin said:
I am zoned, like i'm transported 2 where......idk, its beautiful.

-Spi
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