Would wewe guys be interested in kusoma my new story?

Probably not, the uandishi isn't very good, the plot doesn't seem that great, and it's not very original.


I also noticed many spelling and grammatical errors, and those alone, throw me off of it.

Sounds very intersting.I guess I'll read. :)

it looks pretty cool, I'll go check it out :-D

It sounds like it has a really good plot line.
Sure why not! :)

Three kingdoms have raised from the ashes to take over what is now known as the new world.
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I hope wewe have a better description of your plot's background story. .__.

First, how did this World War III lead to the current state of Earth? Bio-chemical warfare? Nuclear fallout? wewe should explain further. Just knowing this bit of information can draw in some readers.
If a majority of the world is destroyed, how do the kingdoms have a suitable population? A kingdom tends to have a fair population of about 200,000+. How does this kingdom maintain? Is there farmland? How much of their resources is usable and can be maintained? Depending on the cause/effects of the war, it will greatly effect surrounding areas as well as natural resources.
And why only kingdoms? Why no other alternative governments? Many people are against having one ruler; a King. There are multiple options in government. One society could have easily chosen Communism over a Democracy. au instead of evolving into a kingdom, one man could abuse his acquired power to rule as a dictator. In times of desperation, people may often turn to religion which can create zaidi of an occult type of setting.
How are the three kingdoms aware of each other? Geographically, they are very far apart. How do they communicate? Do they even communicate at all? au are they completely ignorant of each other?
Your story is taking place in 2017. That's not very far from now. It's not enough time for society to gather and rebuild themselves, nonetheless repopulate.


"...you've brought to are people?!"
>.> *our

"Why not stop it!?"
I'm sorry, but this sounds very awkward. Rewrite it.

"She felt like she was scream..."
-____- *facepalm* Really? Really?! wewe could not add the simple -ing at the end of the word to make it correct?

"...far to many..."
FJAKSDL FSJAKLDJKS TO?! TO?!?! 'Too' is the correct form. .__.

These are only a few errors. There are many more. Please, for the upendo of humanity, improve your grammar and punctuation. I cannot even force myself to try kusoma your story from what I have seen already of your uandishi on this question. Work on those.

Hater, troll, au just constructive criticism?
wewe decide. :P

Sure thing it sounds really good and after all, wewe are on my shabiki list!

I wrote a story too, it's in my club wewe should read it. trololololol
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Sorry dear, normally I'd be all too open to kusoma stories but I have a very limited amount of time and I doubt I'd be able to.

I'd like to give some constructive criticism, if wewe don't mind.

Every time wewe can ask a swali about one of your sentences/paragraphs/ideas and it doesn't get answered...
ANSWER IT!
The way wewe choose words, sentence types, and the implementation of grammar principles will all have an effect on the reader. Whether it is good au bad, wewe will need to decide.
On the topic of your intro, wewe want to make sure it is as gripping as possible.
wewe have a great idea, all wewe need is a touch of technical work. :)