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So I wrote this chapter and I think it's a bit boring and I tried to fix it but it still seems boring.

“I’m sorry I shouldn’t have bothered you, I’m not even sure why I came, I’ll get a taxi home” I alisema setting down my cup of chai after a dakika and preparing to stand up.
“No don’t worry about it love, wewe can stay here for a while if wewe like” Louis spoke quickly. I looked at him for a moment before leaning back into the couch,
“Ok, thanks” I smiled at him.
“I like your ring” Louis stated and I looked down remembering I was still wearing it.
“My dad gave it to me for my birthday” I alisema trying to keep my voice even.
“When was your birthday?” Louis asked with a smile.
“Halloween? That’s cool”
“How old did wewe turn?”
“It’s a pretty ring” Louis continued despite the fact that I was being extremely uncommunicative.
“So did your dad throw a party for wewe au something?” Louis was still smiling. He was so oblivious it was unfair. I shook my head as tears formed in my eyes. I stared down at my lap. “Hope are wewe ok?” I shook my head again and a tear fell. Louis moved over so he was sitting inayofuata to me. He put his arm around me and I sniffed, scrunching up my face and trying to stop the flow of tears.
We just sat there for a dakika like that. Not saying anything but it wasn’t an awkward silence. It felt nice having his arm around me but all of a sudden I remembered Zayn and the kiss and a knew flow of tears came on. Before long it would be like a cartoon and the room would be flooded with my tears.
“It actually happened the night I was born” I began after I’d calmed down a bit, “My dad was driving to the hospital after he got the call from my mum. It was at night so obviously people had been partying and drinking. My dad was so excited about getting a girl, he always wanted a girl…he didn’t see the drunk driver at the roundabout unt
 Emmy808 posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita
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zanhar1 said:
I think it's fine as is. If wewe try to make it interesting too fast wewe can possibly ruin it, in some cases making a story interesting in the first sentence can make the story seem a little rushed. Some of the best pieces of literature have slower, less action packed beginnings. So keep the story flowing the way wewe have it. ^_^

That's my opinion anyhow.
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posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita 
ok thank wewe :)
Emmy808 posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita
No problem. :)
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