OK, I know my awali fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white kanzu, koti kofia tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to onyesha the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do wewe have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black kofia pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do wewe have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She alisema in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya au something." "Aslyxia, wewe pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up kwa me for the story.)
~Five dakika Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because wewe are older and male, wewe can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are wewe cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the kiti, kiti cha as I lean against the ukuta of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her kofia off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I swing my legs off the kiti, kiti cha and sit normally. "I hope wewe are a good partner, Edward. I can discard wewe from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered kwa this. He shoots back, "What do wewe have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white kanzu, koti kofia tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to onyesha the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do wewe have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black kofia pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do wewe have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She alisema in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya au something." "Aslyxia, wewe pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up kwa me for the story.)
~Five dakika Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because wewe are older and male, wewe can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are wewe cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the kiti, kiti cha as I lean against the ukuta of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her kofia off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I swing my legs off the kiti, kiti cha and sit normally. "I hope wewe are a good partner, Edward. I can discard wewe from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered kwa this. He shoots back, "What do wewe have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."