uandishi Article: Sorrows BTW THIS IS 6 YRS OLD,

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posted by CullensFinest13

wewe hurt me I hope wewe die I cant belive I trusted wewe I cant belive I loved wewe I cant belive I stayed up and worried that wewe wouldnt call. I cant belive that i loved wewe i trusted wewe and cared for you. im tired of wewe its time i let wewe go but your always there wewe wont leave me alone...its time for wewe to leave so never come back walk out of my life i am going to lock my door and never let wewe back in stay out so i can be happy wewe need wewe need to die let me live my own life wewe shouldnt be controlling me anymore im not property im a human and i dont belong to the likes of you, wewe were a waist of my life. and apart of my moyo im locking wewe out never letting wewe back in wewe should never say anything to me afain i cant belive wewe alisema that about me i cant understand why i let wewe in the firdt place makes me sick to my stomach i hate life i hate everything about wewe i cant ever talk to wewe normally anymore wewe live far away but i couldnt take it anymore...i used wewe and i got hurt in the process but i dont understand who wewe are anymore ive let wewe go so im going to lock wewe out never come back again...I want to be alone and so i am and im very happy...

im dying inside cause i miss the way wewe spoke in my ear...

Bibelot, rockzsanders and 3 others like this

Dearheart You should have listened better in English class. Your spelling and grammar are atrocious! Tsk tsk tsk... And the content itself is a bit...melodramatic? Splashy? Cliche? Repetitive? Redundant? Whatever the adjective is, it lacks power and true emotion (for the reader at least. I'm sure it felt real to you, but it's just not working for me as a reader. I'm not feeling it). But keep your chin up and keep working on it. Everyone has room to improve, both you and me. And the more we practice, the best we'll get. :-) Good luck!

r-pattz i guess dearheart didnt like it, but i think it was awesome. 5 out of 5. dearheart, i think it being repetitive was part of the point.

CullensFinest13 dearheart. btw this is about 6 yrs old. thanks asshole =]

Dearheart Thanks for telling me it was 6 years old in the first place, lol. You're welcome! (Ooh, never been called that one before...I kinda like it, actually. It's spicy.) =D How about we stop the name-calling and over-critical comments, cease fire and go sign a peace treaty? What do you say? *offers a chocolate chip cookie? And a handshake? And a cute smiley face?*

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upendo kills chapter 20

posted by hannah_vampire

Thanks for the maoni plz keep kusoma and commenting :)

Nothing zaidi then a visual whisper, like a ghost, slipping past not to be seen.I stood still feet planted on the ground and hoping I would be as peacefully As I could and not be scared of what may lie ahead. I could see the fierce moto dieing in peoples eyes and I was hoping that the moto would not fully die in mine.

I walked through the forest as I stopped to see the most beautiful animal before me A real mbwa mwitu fully black with a white nyota shape on its right front paw and it was so Sleek and beautiful. I saw a girl running towards me...

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Charlie's powers part 2

posted by Charlieminster

left front clockwise: Charlie,Alice,Hollie,Connor and Jon

Charlie walked over to the in front Mrs. Dale's dawati and sat down.
"Charlotte,you haven't got anything to worry about this isn't for anything bad." alisema Mrs.Dale
"okay" alisema Charlie "What is it about then?"
"Your father,sister and myself recived a phone call today from a lady called Miss. Fairchild who is from the school of special skills and she believe that this school would help wewe contorl your power." Mrs.Dale explained "The school is in Index, Washington state. There are six kids your age going and they all have special power as well. The semester begins this week end. Do wewe want to go...

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Missing: The Gap in the Rock, part 1

posted by harrypotterbest

The newspaper I my hand was already rolled in a tight ball. I biked as fast as I could toward my best friend Maisi’s house. I had already told her I was coming, but not why.
The reason I was going was infuriating, mysterious, and suspicious. How and why someone would do such a thing was a mystery. As Maisi’s house came into view, I hopped of my bike and put it in their bike chain. I ran up the steps and rang the doorbell continuously. Maisi opened it and ushered me inside. We both went up to her room.
She shut the door. ‘Okay,’ she said. ‘Out with it. What’s the matter? wewe look...

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Summary of my Novel

posted by booklover13

Heres the summary the novel I recently finished writing. I'm not great at uandishi summaries, but i tried :) Please comment!!!

Its placed in older times, with magic and stuff like that, just fyi!

Ash and Anna are two ordinary girls, living two seperate lives in a world where magic is abundant. But when their prophecy brings the twin sisters together, and they learn that they have a long-lost triplet brother, kidnapped at birth, their worlds are turned upside-down, and every choice they make will affect the fate of the entire world.

When the two girls learn of their exceptional magical ablities,...

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The Reverse

posted by Hime666

This is a story of SAW and in this story Billy (AKA Jigsaw) is a human^^

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As Billy was walking in the abonded house.He sighs as he realises how long he had been alone.He walks in the room where John was right now making plans for new traps. "Hey John?"He asked and walked up to him. "Yes,Billy?"John asks. "Is there...Anyone who have came in here?"Billy asks hopefully. "no sorry.."Joh says and continues making the trap plans. "Oh...I didnt have anything else to say..."Billy says and walks out of John's...

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Another snippet of my unnamed story.

posted by starwarsfangirl

This is another piece of a story I've been writing...
If you've read the other part, this has absolutely nothing to do with Drew. NOTHING.
This takes place in a mythical and magical country known as Dragomria.
Please review!

Light hadn’t even graced the towers of the palace in the capitol city of Dragomria as the scribe rushed through the grand corridors. He burst into the kiti cha enzi room.
“Your Majesties! Prince Berthold has chosen a bride!” He said, gasping for air. Queen Callidora stood, her bright red hair cascading down to her waist, her brilliant green eyes cutting like a kisu through...

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upendo Kills chapter 14

posted by hannah_vampire

Sorry that this took so long I hope wewe like it, I was busy so sorry :)

Dear diary,

I wish that I was someone else, All the drama was giving me a headache and
I can’t think on what was important. I need some where to go, Blair was still
In the hospital and I guess I could go there I mean with no distractions.
Bye

I couldn’t open the front door, I ran around to the back door and I was lucky
That the key was still hidden in the crack of the bricks. I sat on my kitanda and closed
My eyes, finally some peace and I can think straight now.

I heard the creak of my door and opened my eyes, ‘Do wewe ever...

From the Mind of a Raven

posted by Sylar-Gray

From the Mind of a Raven

Irene

I shoved the rusty key into the ancient looking lock. I turned it a hard left and the giant door creaked opened. The realtor was going on about the history of the house. But I already knew all that. As the door open a chill went through me, as if warning me of something in the house. I walked in, leaving the key in the lock, and had a look around the parlor. It was huge, with a high ceiling with grates in it. I saw something black songesha behind the grate and jumped back.
“Is there any history of rats in this house?”
“Uh…no. but as I was saying...”
“I know....

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Yeah Me; The nerd Chapter 3 All I Wanted

posted by cute20k

I wondered if my dad knew where I was. I wondered if he cared. A father should care if his daughter spends the night at some guys house, shouldn't he? A father should do a lot of things that mine doesn't do. On the upside, he's probably out buying Cleetus a big old bone. Woohoo.
I looked up into Ethan's eyes and tried to meet his gaze. The way the shimmered made me feel like my eyes were the dullest thing on earth. Annabella liked this guy and I knew I was wrong to be this close to him. I promised her I would not get too close to him, but I almost kissed him. Almost, the key word.
I stayed...

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Duett ( part 1)

posted by inexplicable

It was my turn re-one time far too late.
The dress rehearsal already had started a quarter saa zamani and I arrived panting and completely breathless in the test room.
yes, wewe are, finite since Daniela, our rehearsing leader, shouted to me, ".
> > excuse me, I could not get away from the musicschool earlier<<, I answered still struggling for breath.

Yes, if there was something I really loved, then it was the theater and the music.
Unfortunately, I did not manage to get both things under a hat here so that I paint,
it was late there. The dress rehearsal proceeded despite my late arrival...

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Darkened Bliss: First page to Chapter One

posted by Heya

Chapter 1
Negative stranger

“Have a backbone . . . wait, your an arthropod.”

The sun was burning my eyes as the world spun around me. When I opened them, my eyes burned and then i thought I heard a sizzle, which, of course, was my imagination. I could feel the burning sensation on my upper arm from the shot last night. Crazy. The sunny burn kept burning my pupils until I opened my eyes fully. Then I notice that it’s just my light in my room.
Bummer.
I sat up and rubbed the sore spot on my upper arm area. Shots hurt zaidi than wewe think. When...

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Is it worth living for? chapter 2

posted by Annacrombie

This is writen in the point of view of Kara
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Kara stood in apartment and stared out of thr window, just a few moments zamani someone stopped her from jumping off her flat roof.

"Kara..."the voice said, it was the same voice of the man who saved her.

Kara looked at the time, it was 11.48. She yawned and went into her bedroom.After getting changed she slipped into her bed.That voice ringed through her ears."Kara....".She closed her eyes and almost fell asleep when she herd someone call her name "Kara...."

There was a knock on the front door, Kara grabbed her dressing kanzu, gown and put on her slippers. She walked over to the door and opened it. There was a piece of paper on the floor with wriing on it. I was a note, on the note was written in 7 days all will be alright

Kara awoke from her bed, had it all been a dream? Kara noticed that she had the note in her hand.She read the note over and over again. What did it mean?

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Kingdom Hearts: Ansem's Return 1. The Run

posted by DestinyGirl

Okay, so.... hi! My name is Serenna and I'm a huge shabiki of Kingdom Hearts! ^_^ I've been uandishi for years now and I've made lots of different KH fanfics so here's one of'em! Hope wewe all like it!:)

Summary: In Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories, after Riku defeated Ansem, he alisema he would someday return. And now he's back. But what is Ansem after? And who is this new, mysterious, strong girl?

~1. The Run

I jumped a good ten feet in the air, arriving softly in the dense forestry. I looked behind me, checking to make sure the shadows weren't following me anymore. I'd been running non-stop for a good...

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this is made for my ISB colleagues please ignore (script)

posted by nessienjake

so...her it goes:P

Actors:~Ecem
~Sari
~selen
~sara
~rumeysa
~sevde
~sevde
~dursun
~sufian
~firas
~roberto
~alex
~anthony
...
Scene starts off in class,the first siku at school,everybody looking tired,waiting for they're form teacher to be presented.
(a moment of silence as the door slowly opens...I'll be helping on that one!...and a creepy looking teacher steps inside the class-room)
(ACT 1)
Radu:(low and dark voice) Hello....everybody Im your new teacher as we all~~

Alex: yeah,yeah we know,we know

Radu:(laughs sinisterly)you'd wished wewe didnt say that.NOW...you've been..."disrespectful" to the teacher,come outside...

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Dark Satisfaction

posted by EmoKidSteven

when i just have been through the worse in my life
my eyes turn black,my skin turns white
i'll be like a ghost
life has been sucked right from me
i feel my skin tearing apart like it's going to shred
i'm shaking and lonely and cold
but it's funny that my only savior is just a little sharp metal thing
just a small razor can heal me that much?!
better than anybody i have ever known
i slide my left arm just a little as a start and i feel like i need zaidi and zaidi and more...
until i can not get enough
but then i feel so good,almost satisfied
watching my blood spilling on the floor,drop after drop very slowly
that's just the hottest painful pleasure i have ever experienced
i feel so unbalanced,so numb
i don't know if i need someone to touch me au to shoot me to know that i'm still alive
but i know i won't stop
i'll cut myself and fuck the wound
i'll lick my blood for all my pain

Lisa and Minrough chapter 2

posted by Flana_2

    “Do wewe realy think we’ll catch a shooting nyota with all the lights”?
        “Sure we will” Gina said, “I hope”. I was laughing at her when she called out, “Make a wish”! I turned to a long, pink faded.
        “Like I didn’t see that coming”!
My mom came outside.
     “Gina, your mom is waiting out front” Her smile came back.” At least we saw something”!! She trough her messenger bag over her shoulder. I smiled...

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Lisa and Minrough chapter 1

posted by Flana_2

Hi! I’m Lisa, the newest of the Hoycan clan. My story of how I got here is a tale of braveness, bullies, and ocean water. So snuggle up with a great friend and a big bowl of popcorn and begin a journey like none other wewe ever come by!! GO ON!!!
Two gorges wanyama were running off into the moon light. Ones name was Lisa, the other was Brad.
“I upendo wewe Lisa” Brad said
“I upendo wewe too Brad”! They were a short distance away when RIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The school kengele rang for lunch. I awoken from my daydream and hurried out the door. Hi, I’m Lisa the average...

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Still of the night ch.25

posted by TeamRosalieHale

25: Freewill

They walked up the metal staircase, stepping on a solid metal platform that extended from one ukuta to the next. This room was much brighter, lit kwa dozens of lights, one area tucked away in a corner was nearly blanketed in darkness. Jack walked half-way across it before he stopped and looked down. “What is this?” she asked though she suspected she knew the answer.
“It’s where the magic happens.” She looked down, several people in white lab coats walked around two people on separate hospital beds, they were motionless and were hooked up to life support systems. They moved...

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Still of the night ch.23

posted by TeamRosalieHale

23: Run to the Hills

IT had caught the right trail, was following it again, swiftly passing into Indiana, Ohio followed dakika later. Yes, IT was getting closer to what master wanted-and this time nothing would stop IT.
Nothing.
Already the carriage had passed into West Virginia, Tristan and Jack were both tense as to what was waiting at home, though they hid it from Rosalie as well as they could. “Are wewe sure wewe don’t need to hunt?” Jack asked her for the billionth time.
She sighed but smiled. “I’m sure. The siku I found wewe again we had hunted.” She made a face as she said...

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Still of the night ch.18

posted by TeamRosalieHale

18: Home

The siku was nearly over, kwa now they had reached their destination: Springfield, Illinois. Several times the carriage had stopped, Tristan leaving for short periods of time, always returning silent, the carriage marched on. He had retired when they were almost in Illinois, coming upon the border between Iowa and Illinois. David had remained with Jack and Rosalie, though he kept to himself, For Whom the kengele Tolls had been replaced with A Tale of Two Cities. Eventually though he too went to his room, leaving Jack and Rosalie alone.
They were on the couch, Rosalie’s head on Jack’s...