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What did wewe think of my story so far, if wewe liked it tell me and if wewe didnt like it tell me and if wewe think i should continue to keep uandishi it up here for wewe to read tell me that too, its always good to hear from others.

Melrose Bennet is a 16 mwaka old girl who lives in Florence, Oregon. She is the best runner on the school track team and while she isnt as good at paying attention in school she makes up for it kwa passing never the less. She lives with her parents and one brother who is the all nyota at everything in school, Tyler. The summer approaches and Melrose is one of those girls who dont really think that much about guys and romance she actually dispises the PDA community.
She decides to get a job over the summer at an ice cream duka just down the mitaani, mtaa from a photoshop where she meets Kent. Kent is 3 years older than Melrose and not really someone she see's herself liking in any way. She hates him immediately and the zaidi she does the zaidi Kent finds it hard to ignore her au stay away from her, though he shouldnt be with her in the first place he finds himself compelled with her soul and Melrose may just find true upendo but she's not sure she wants it, not over the summer, not ever. Deep secrets are unraveled and the Paper kisses really do cut deep.
 What did wewe think of my story so far, if wewe liked it tell me and if wewe didnt like it tell me and if wewe think i should continue to keep uandishi it up here for wewe to read tell me that too, its always good to hear from others.
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ii upendo that name... Melrose.... very pretty.
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kuykendall said:
I liked the what I seen as a summary, but it does seem familiar, I'm not exactly familiar with Twilight so I'm not making that sort of simlilarity. If wewe wanna make a book that wewe think people will read then that might be a good choice if wewe think that wewe sounded a bit like wewe were repeating something, then it did sort of seem like it. I do however think you'd be a very good writer just pull your ideas from zaidi than one genre then put them together because if wewe pull it from just one then it could get boring. That is all! I hope I helped. :)
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Night-Sky said:
Hmm...I'm not entierly sure...
It seems kind of...familliar...
What genre is it?
"Paper kisses really do cut deep." oh, I like that line!
But, to be entierly honest, I'm very sorry but it sounds a little bit like Twilight.
I think maybe wewe have ripped the idea off a little bit without meaning to. Very sorry! Please don't hate me!!!
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MadamOcta13 said:
I don't really get the whole "compelled with her soul" thing. It sounds kind of cheesy. Does it have any conflict? Because it doesn't sound too interesting at the moment.
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edward-lover456 said:
Yes... awesome story I want the viungo to them please!!!
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Heya said:
It goes too fast...sorry. So wewe won't feel bad, I am a shabiki of you!
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cloudcastle said:

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Hello fire_ice . . .

Maybe the following could help . . .

1 fair.

2 like.

3 love.

4 lust.

5 hate.

Perhaps to guide from number 5 to 1.

Story could have a happy ending.

Hope wewe have a happy Thursday.

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