Avatar The Last Airbender

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What do wewe think about my fanfiction?

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I started making it last summer, there are only oc's and i really need some feedback ( here and on deviantart ).
P.S. I f wewe are going to actually read it I want to say sorry for the grammar errors (english it'd not my mother language and my keyboar hates me )
 shippo_33 posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita
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Avatar The Last Airbender Majibu

OptimusThunder said:
I read chapters 1 and 2. Good start! I applaud your creativity and I like the premise of chapter 1.
As an aspiring writer myself, I suggest that wewe put in some descriptions of the surroundings and make your characters do things, songesha around and be active. Try to balance the dialogue with actions.
Also, sometimes I got confused on who was talking. Use some quick (I said) au (he said) after the dialogue to make it zaidi clear to the reader who is talking.

Again, good work. Keep writing!
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posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita 
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I got the same advice and i started adding zaidi description in the chapter 9. I can tell wewe tings are getting weird
shippo_33 posted zaidi ya mwaka mmoja uliopita
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