What would wewe like to be changed about Twilight in a re-write?

Where to begin with rewrites, lol! I'm an aspiring writer myself (it's my passion), and have often contemplated about doing a shabiki fiction rewrite of Twilight (I'm zaidi edging towards New Moon though because of how terrible and depressing it was).

Well, the first thing I would definitely want changed in a rewrite is NO SPARKLING VAMPIRES!

Exchange Edward's abusive behavior for a personality, and actually have it to where he did have some relationships before Bella. I hated how it seemed like he was forcing Bella to go to prom even though she wanted. They could have done something that maybe she really WANTED to do and still dress up.

Bella, let's face it, is one of the worst fictional characters, not to mention she's a tease. I grudgingly admit that I did like her in the first book, but in later books, forget it. I would like to see her as something of a better suited role model for girls (nothing hardcore like Wonder Woman). I would also upendo to see her actually treated like a new kid and not get so much attention from the guys.

Give a reason for why Bella and Edward are in upendo and not just because of his looks and her scent.

Honestly, I would probably also have it that through some charm au something that the Cullens are able to live out in the sunlight if wewe wanna keep the angle of them still going to high school.

Establish James as a villain, not just some addition lamely added in the last few chapters. Make us upendo to hate him.

zaidi importantly, the dialogue. Have to be careful with that.

Good luck!

I would like to have changed, Edwards stalker like behaviour, Bella's lack of independance, Jacob falling in upendo with a baby and i wouldn't write that the Wanyonya damu sparkle. I'm sure there's alot zaidi that could be changed but these would be my main goals if i re wrote the story. :)

Hello~ ^.^

Good idea! :) I've had the same idea with another series, but kudos to wewe for taking the initiative. I'll try to help~
I think some definite changes to the plot line should be made, other than what wewe have stated.
Jasper needs zaidi limelight. Yes, if I am a fangirl over any part of twilight, at all, it shall be over Jasper, of course, it's not necessary to make the book perfect, but I'd be very happy, so I suppose it's a selfish request.
There also needs to be zaidi variety in Forks High School, in the amount/personality/behavior of the boys obsessed with Bella. That just needs changing.
Two zaidi things:
Less Bella x Edward gushiness, it would help to make the actual plot line start sooner.
I suppose I could say the quality of the writing, but that goes with saying~ :) Seeing as it's being re-written.

Last one! :D It may not apply, but, in Eclipse, there needs to be zaidi of a plot twist. It doesn't seem to make sense that Bella should figure out what "super-intelligent" Wanyonya damu failed to, and the context of that apocalypse doesn't make sense either. In my opinion, They shouldn't know until the last dakika that the vamps are after Bella, and red herrings (courtesy of someone known as A-l-i-c-e) should occur.

Wow! xD That was much zaidi long-winded than I had originally planned.
Anyway, good luck on your re-write! :)

~~Blue

1. Give the Cullens zaidi of a personality and zaidi speech.
2. Edward wouldn't watch Bella sleep because and 3. Make Jacob fall in upendo with Leah not a baby.

I'll make it easy for you: CHange everything but there being a chracter named Bella who must decide between the two loves of her life (Edward and Jacob) but please write it in a way that there's an actual burden with chosing.

ALso: I would upendo it wewe did post it, Twilight despratly needs to be re-written and i'd upendo to see you're view

~Pengiun098~

~Bella - I would make her less whiney and zaidi relatable.
~Edward - erm... everything?
~Imprinting - it wouldn't be there.
~Vampires - they wouldn't sparkle
~Minor/background characters - I'd give them zaidi attention. There were so many characters that had so much potential that were just left there. (I'm sure I would have hated Lauren had she actually, ya know, done something mean.)I also would have alisema what happened to them. I think SMeyer has them melt into vapor au something - they just kinda faded away.
~Climax - there would be a battle/fight/argument/conflict in every book.
~Grammar/spelling/word-usage - they wouldn't be there. au if they were, they would be minor problems, not in-your-face problems.
~Breaking Dawn wouldn't have happened.

Everthing. Just everything.

One of the things I'd like to change is Meyers description of vampires. I mean seriously, they sparkle? If i were to write a book i would not want one of my main characters to be a sparkling vampire... I'd also change the personalities of her characters(if they even have one). I mean Edward is an abusive stalker-ish obsessive boyfriend. Those traits are not good. And bella is someone who is dependent on Edward and is totally helpless without him and counts on him(or Jacob) to save the day. And Jacob imprinting on renesmee?Can i say gross much??

I would change quite a bit...um a few?
a better villian, not just some 'and suddenly evil vamps come blah blah blah' A good evil character has to have a reason for being evil! They need to have something in their past that drove them to be evil.
Um what else...
Don't use the whole 'vampires are really just brooding goths' that's kinda old...

oh! the wolves, I'm sorry but the Mbwa mwitu loups annoyed me. They were not 'werewolves' they were shamens. A werewolf has no choise in it's transformation,while whilst in their beast form they loss their human mind. Shamens took the form of the thing the enemy feared most.

The Edward-bella-Jacob triange? only if there is some actual internal conflict. Not 'oh I upendo edward but I kinda like Jacob too but I upendo Edward more'

The physical answer is too long (It took up 6 pages on Word -.-) so I'll just say this:

Pretty much everything, but I'd mainly change the "sparkly vampires" bit and the way this book poisons the minds of innocent teenagers (and some adults...).

I think Edward should find it harder to resist killing Bella. I mean, he keeps going on about how difficult it is and yet always appears to be perfectly in control... He should at least really TRY to drink her blood once.

Secondly, make some non-vamps have a greater role. Humans who aren't Bella should get occasions to actually, wewe know, DO something....

Major thing to me; creat arguments. Between Edward and Bella, that is. I mean, proper ones. wewe can't have chemistry if nothing bad ever happens between them. This is mostly a problem in New Moon (I mean, c'mon! He left her! I don't care if it was for her own good, she should get a least a TINY bit angry!) but if you're only doing the first book, I'd really like wewe to fit in some proper chemistry.

And finnally, put zaidi depth into Alice's friendship with Bella. It was something I actually liked in the books, and I'd have loved it if it could've been a little zaidi well developed. Again, not constantly fine, add some real arguements.

Ahaha, we disagree so entirely ^_^ For me the only problem was the ending. I hate children, and I don't like it when characters in vitabu have them, because they upendo the child zaidi than each other :( I disliked Breaking Dawn purely because it was tragically lacking in certain fetus-expulsive surgical procedures.

1. I'd make the majority of the characters slightly older. Esme and Carlisle would both be in their thirties (Carlisle can't be taken seriously as a doctor if he looks 23; in the UK he'd have just finished his degree at that age and I don't know if he'd have even finished his training in America. Also, I can't really see a family of late teens viewing adults in their twenties as parents, zaidi like older siblings). Bella and Edward would be 18/19, the rest of the Cullens around the same age au slightly older. Bella would have moved back to Forks to attend a nearby college. Jacob would be in his final mwaka in high school.
2. Bella would actually call Edward out about some of the stalkery/controlling things he does, e.g. watching her sleep, following her to Seattle, preventing her from visiting Jacob. They'd argue about it. Edward would realise why he was in the wrong, apologise and actually change his behaviour.
3. The conversation in Breaking Dawn regarding the different chromosome numbers of humans, Wanyonya damu and mtu-bweha would be omitted. It didn't make sense, aliyopewa that the different beings can interbreed and turn into each other. It was also completely irrelevant.
4. The method of turning humans into Wanyonya damu would need to become a bit zaidi complicated, to explain why Edward's venom didn't turn Bella when he sucked James' venom out (I can't think of another way to save her then, aliyopewa that there were no non-venomous part-vampires nearby).